literature

On Realizing

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When they opened her,
she spilled forth, contained by nothing but color.

A blossom state of mind
                              infesting where the lifeblood breaks its moments into
waiting.
Around she
                 came upon them and caught
                                                   them where they slept, so many
motionless manners misfortune forgot to unwind.

Larger than     her
                  inside now
                  and growing ever larger, she
slides between their fingers when they try to reconcile the incision that freed

her.

When dark from deep comes rising to puncture
           mesmerizing swirls of light and shafts of saffron,
                                   they have lost their own ideas to her cosmos.

She
swallows each heart,
each rhythm, and strengthens her
        music resounding.
Forgotten now forever that she
the formless
ever found a way to live her breathing in the words she
                                                                      was conceiving, ill begotten children of  

She. A word for lost and all the same a synonym for found.
Go to it, chuds. Second draft. Critique, interpretations, and problems you have with it are all things I would love to hear about. :)

Once again, I just don't know how you can justify putting complex ideas of poetry in categories, but there you have it.

EDIT: Okay, the indentions are fixed as much as I can with this editing system, so. Close enough...

EDIT 2: Changed "stays between their fingers" to "slides between their fingers"
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iheartgnomes's avatar
i really enjoyed this! and i knew exactly what you were saying...well at least i think so :P usually i just skip past writings bc im too lazy to read them but this one definitely got my attention...you are one amazing writer! you have quite the career ahead of you!