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When they opened her,
she spilled forth, contained by nothing but color.
A blossom state of mind
infesting where the lifeblood breaks its moments into
waiting.
Around she
came upon them and caught
them where they slept, so many
motionless manners misfortune forgot to unwind.
Larger than her
inside now
and growing ever larger, she
slides between their fingers when they try to reconcile the incision that freed
her.
When dark from deep comes rising to puncture
mesmerizing swirls of light and shafts of saffron,
they have lost their own ideas to her cosmos.
She
swallows each heart,
each rhythm, and strengthens her
music resounding.
Forgotten now forever that she
the formless
ever found a way to live her breathing in the words she
was conceiving, ill begotten children of
She. A word for lost and all the same a synonym for found.
she spilled forth, contained by nothing but color.
A blossom state of mind
infesting where the lifeblood breaks its moments into
waiting.
Around she
came upon them and caught
them where they slept, so many
motionless manners misfortune forgot to unwind.
Larger than her
inside now
and growing ever larger, she
slides between their fingers when they try to reconcile the incision that freed
her.
When dark from deep comes rising to puncture
mesmerizing swirls of light and shafts of saffron,
they have lost their own ideas to her cosmos.
She
swallows each heart,
each rhythm, and strengthens her
music resounding.
Forgotten now forever that she
the formless
ever found a way to live her breathing in the words she
was conceiving, ill begotten children of
She. A word for lost and all the same a synonym for found.
Go to it, chuds. Second draft. Critique, interpretations, and problems you have with it are all things I would love to hear about.
Once again, I just don't know how you can justify putting complex ideas of poetry in categories, but there you have it.
EDIT: Okay, the indentions are fixed as much as I can with this editing system, so. Close enough...
EDIT 2: Changed "stays between their fingers" to "slides between their fingers"
Once again, I just don't know how you can justify putting complex ideas of poetry in categories, but there you have it.
EDIT: Okay, the indentions are fixed as much as I can with this editing system, so. Close enough...
EDIT 2: Changed "stays between their fingers" to "slides between their fingers"
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i really enjoyed this! and i knew exactly what you were saying...well at least i think so usually i just skip past writings bc im too lazy to read them but this one definitely got my attention...you are one amazing writer! you have quite the career ahead of you!