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Full text original version of Cast Shadows: [link]
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Gyah...hours and hours later...
Many thanks to
, my eternal editor for all things Cast Shadows, and who put a great deal of effort into helping me make this possible.
Let me clarify a few things now.
1) I am not making any promises regarding a page two. I would like to make one, but don't hold your breath. Want to know what's happening? I strongly suggest following the above link rather than waiting. However, don't lose hope completely. I'll leave it at that.
2) I mainly did this because I have plans for another comic which are still very much in the works, and I wanted to see if I had the guts to make a comic with a story I already had established. I'm not sure I do.
That and I wanted to give Cast Shadows a slightly broader audience than it currently has.
3) I know this is a rather straight forward story-telling approach, rather than a more interesting, make-you-think sort of comic (which I want my other to be), but that is rather how Cast Shadows is, so.
4) My coloring style was never made to translate into comics. Yikes. A little too complicated, maybe, for many pages on end.
5) Unless something on the harness is so wrong that it would keep it from functioning properly, I am not interested in changing it. Call me a bad sport, but aaagh. Just simplifying the collar enough to make it work on a comic page was a BEAST.
~
Critique is more than welcome. I am so new to the comic making world, I am still umbilically connected to writing. So any suggestions for improving layout, text, coloring, etc. are welcome. I may not take them, as some things I did actually were intentional, but I still welcome food for thought.
The text on the third panel, the one with the road: I know you can't read it. I tried everything, I swear. @_@ But. I mean. If you have an idea, throw it my way. If I tell you I tried it, don't be surprised?
~
I also am delighted with critique on the text version. #^.^#
~
Gyah...hours and hours later...
Many thanks to
, my eternal editor for all things Cast Shadows, and who put a great deal of effort into helping me make this possible.Let me clarify a few things now.
1) I am not making any promises regarding a page two. I would like to make one, but don't hold your breath. Want to know what's happening? I strongly suggest following the above link rather than waiting. However, don't lose hope completely. I'll leave it at that.
2) I mainly did this because I have plans for another comic which are still very much in the works, and I wanted to see if I had the guts to make a comic with a story I already had established. I'm not sure I do.
That and I wanted to give Cast Shadows a slightly broader audience than it currently has.3) I know this is a rather straight forward story-telling approach, rather than a more interesting, make-you-think sort of comic (which I want my other to be), but that is rather how Cast Shadows is, so.
4) My coloring style was never made to translate into comics. Yikes. A little too complicated, maybe, for many pages on end.
5) Unless something on the harness is so wrong that it would keep it from functioning properly, I am not interested in changing it.
Call me a bad sport, but aaagh. Just simplifying the collar enough to make it work on a comic page was a BEAST. ~
Critique is more than welcome. I am so new to the comic making world, I am still umbilically connected to writing. So any suggestions for improving layout, text, coloring, etc. are welcome. I may not take them, as some things I did actually were intentional, but I still welcome food for thought.
The text on the third panel, the one with the road: I know you can't read it. I tried everything, I swear. @_@ But. I mean. If you have an idea, throw it my way. If I tell you I tried it, don't be surprised?
~
I also am delighted with critique on the text version. #^.^#
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Love I don't know anything about comics though, so my opinion might not be worth much! Also...I'm going for it cause last time you did it "just for me"...you should make a page two! For real! And, I don't think that the text is impossible to read...maybe a little difficult, but not impossible!
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"In the caverns of tomorrow with just our flashlights and our love, we must plunge."
And...since you asked so nicely...I'll see what I can do.
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"The stuff of earth competes for the allegiance I only to the Giver of all good things." - If I Stand, Rich Mullins
You should definitely do more...if you feel up to it of coarse. (and I know what you mean about being new to comics...the couple pages I've drawn of some of my things aren't even in the right sequence XD)
And I could read the text in that panel just fine.
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I like COMMENTS on my art....*hint, hint* (I never get any...>.>
# 1 fan of the "I'm Waaaaaaiiiting" line.
My Fanfic.net page: [link]
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"In the caverns of tomorrow with just our flashlights and our love, we must plunge."
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"The stuff of earth competes for the allegiance I only to the Giver of all good things." - If I Stand, Rich Mullins
The text is fine btw. It goes witht he mood of the comic very well.
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"The stuff of earth competes for the allegiance I only to the Giver of all good things." - If I Stand, Rich Mullins
It's still wonderful. Really!
I didnt finish all of it, - not even half XD - but I read part of the first chapter and MAAAANNN you got tallent! Love it!
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Its amazing how you feel when something you love soo dearly can be taken away from you in just a blink of an eye...
First off, I love the style of the paneling. It does offer the affect that the story is not plain black and white, or that it's a simple straight path your characters may take. They've got a harder road, the lines are harsher.
Don't be too concerned with the harness and whether it seems functional. Sometimes it's better for it to appear "nice" and serve a visual purpose than for it to work right.
Time saving tips that may help if you want to go to pg2. It's good to draw the environment to establish a setting--but not every panel needs it to be there. Adding the setting in panels too much can confuse the reader from the main characters and the point you're making. That's not to say "skip them" just that you don't have to worry about excesively drawing them.
Color strips look nice, but in the end may be too time consuming to hold your interest if you want to continue further. Most comics out in the market are made by *several people* at once, all having different jobs (penciler, background artist, inker, colorist, letterer). For one person to do it all at once can be a bit of a hastle. You could experiment with just inked works (using heavy black and white in a fundemental way to express things), do the work in grayscale (no fussing on which colors seem best), or there is toning you could consider too. If you manage to stick with color, you might want to study up on speed painting techniques, or to simplify the amount of shading/highlighting you put into the piece.
As for your text in the 3rd panel, you might want to consider adding a black outline to the words, just to help punch them out a little.
The horses are beautiful, and the writing on the panel alone hooks you incredibly well. I think your experience in writing should translate well into the dialogue and narrative, rather well if I say so.
I hope this helps out ^_^ if you've any questions or need input on comics at all, I've always got an ear.
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